I am struggling with my DIY Invitations. We are doing pocket invitations and I need assistance with wording, etiquette, and general objective thoughts on our invitation and then an added enclosure..I would really appreciate some advice as these need to be sent out very soon.
My invitation reads as follows, can anyone tell me if it grammatically correct?
A beautiful beach. A clear blue sky.
A love united with waves crashing by.
Please join us, as well as our parents, as we
Unite in marriage.
Wednesday, the twenty-second of April
two thousand fifteen
at four-thirty in the afternoon.
Here is the enclosure...I need a title for it and I can't think of anything that sounds great... Is it ok to ask people to donate to a charity verses sending gifts ... help please.
Our personal note...
We would like to thank all of our family and friends for sharing in our joy, as we begin our journey to unite as husband and wife. It is our hope that you are able to join us in paradise for this special occasion.
Although it would be fantastic to have all our loved ones with us on our special day, we do understand the burdens of travel outside of the United States.We appreciate your thoughts as we join together as one.
We are beyond blessed with all that we have, so in lieu of gifts, we ask that you consider donating to one of our two favorite charities:
Hope for Steve: Website: HopeForSteve.com
St. Jude Children’s Research Hospital
Bride & Groom