Originally Posted by jolene028
ladies, I love that we are all here to help each other, and give support! Here is my pre-travel brochure that I am going to send with two luggage tags in probably August, it has been a labour of love but now I need suggestions, comments and proof reading! So let me know what you think, be honest I am to close to it now to make hard choices!!!
Thanks in advace!
Jolene - this looks fantastic! I might borrow your template when I make mine, if you don't mind!!
I just have a few comments. Please don't take offence to any of this but I am just super nit picky about grammar and formatting!
The first page is great. The only thing I noticed was where you talk about checked baggage you have "Unless otherwise noted, any numbers of pieces...." I'd get rid of the "s" on numbers.
On the second page everything looks great. The only thing is, and I am not sure if its just the way it came up on my program, but under the "Know Before You Go" section. There is punctuation missing in some of the paragraphs. It looks like you started it bullet form but some of the paragraphs have punctuation and some do not... I'd just clean that up a bit. And one last thing " Any medication is not widely available..." I think it might sound better "Medications are not widely available in Cuba. So please be sure to take enough... etc". And maybe also mention to bring things like immodium, tums, stuff for upset stomach and diahrrea because its hard to get there and expensive. The only other thing I would add if this was my brochure maybe would be to make sure to bring enough sunscreen because its very expensive to purchase there.
I hope this was helpful!! But amazing job! It really does look fantastic!!!