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#1 AmyInMI

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    Posted 01 April 2007 - 10:29 PM

    I am in need of some suggestions on how to word our invitations. I came across the wording below and really liked it but am unsure of the proper etiquette.
    Both sets of parents have offered to help with the wedding so I am assuming both should be listed on the invite. The only dilema is that Aaron's parents are divorced. His dad (at this time) has not been invited (longgg story) and will not be listed. His mom has remarried this past year. Due to the fact that they live on the other side of the country, we do not know Larry, her husband, much at all. Aaron doesn't really refer to him as a "step-dad" either.

    Here's what I have:

    LOVE WAS MEANT TO BE SHARED
    WITH PARENTS, FAMILY, AND FRIENDS.

    Amy Lynn ____
    AND
    Aaron Vashon _____
    HAVE FOUND LOVE IN EACH OTHER.

    BECAUSE YOU HAVE SHARED IN THEIR LIVES
    BY YOUR FRIENDSHIP AND LOVE
    WE INVITE YOU TO CELEBRATE WITH US
    THE MARRIAGE OF OUR CHILDREN
    ON MAY 31, 2008
    AT 5:00PM
    SECRETS CAPRI RIVIERA CANCUN
    RIVIERA MAYA, MEXICO

    MR. AND MRS. HENRY ____
    MR. AND MRS. LAWRENCE ____



    Is this the "proper" way to write this?
    Thanks in advance!!
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    May 10, 2008
    Dreams Tulum, Riviera Maya, Mexico

    #2 SusanK

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      Posted 02 April 2007 - 09:06 AM

      I have never heard this wording before...very nice. My only suggestion is that you may want to consider using your mothers' first names and opposed to Mr. and Mrs.

      Henry and "Jane" __________
      Lawrence and "Jane"____________

      This way his mother is specifically mentioned as opposed to just his step-dad. I also personally think that the Mr. and Mrs. thing is kind of old-fashion...why should the woman's name be dropped? Anyway, that's how I did my wording...just a suggestion :)
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      #3 Sarah

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        Posted 02 April 2007 - 09:43 AM

        Hey Amy, how's it going?
        I like the wording of the invitation and here are my suggestions:


        LOVE WAS MEANT TO BE SHARED
        WITH PARENTS, FAMILY, AND FRIENDS.

        Amy Lynn ____
        AND
        Aaron Vashon _____
        HAVE FOUND LOVE IN EACH OTHER.

        BECAUSE YOU HAVE SHARED IN Our (Or Their) LIVES
        BY YOUR FRIENDSHIP AND LOVE
        WE(Or They), along with our (Their) parents,
        Henry and "Jane" ____
        and
        "Ann" and Lawrence _____,

        INVITE YOU TO CELEBRATE WITH US (Join us in celebration)
        As we (They) join in marriage (or exchange vows of marriage, etc)
        ON MAY 31, 2008
        AT 5:00PM
        SECRETS CAPRI RIVIERA CANCUN
        RIVIERA MAYA, MEXICO



        The way you had it worded was switching back and forth- from you and Aaron sounding like you were issuing the invitation, and then the "marriage of our children" part at the end sounded like the parents were issuing the invitation.

        Also, you need to decide if you want your wording to sound like it's coming from the third person or not. Some of your wording is and some of it isn't...

        If "Ann" is Aaron's mom and Lawrence is the stepdad, I would list "Ann" first. Just my personal opinion- this isn't necessarily proper etiquette.

        I hope that makes sense...If you want me to retype it with third person wording or direct individual wording I can.

        #4 AmyInMI

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          Posted 02 April 2007 - 10:31 AM

          Thanks for the suggestions guys!! I thought the same thing as I was typing it Sarah, as far as the 3rd person. I do like listing the mother's names, as well as listsing Robin, Aaron's mom before Larry.


          What do you think about this:

          LOVE WAS MEANT TO BE SHARED
          WITH PARENTS, FAMILY, AND FRIENDS.

          Amy Lynn C
          AND
          Aaron Vashon L
          HAVE FOUND LOVE IN EACH OTHER.

          BECAUSE YOU HAVE SHARED IN OUR LIVES
          BY YOUR FRIENDSHIP AND LOVE
          WE, ALONG WITH OUR PARENTS,
          HENRY AND CARRIE C
          AND
          ROBIN AND LAWRENCE G,
          INVITE YOU TO JOIN IN CELEBRATION
          AS WE JOIN IN MARRIAGE
          ON MAY 31, 2008
          AT 5:00PM
          SECRETS CAPRI RIVIERA CANCUN
          RIVIERA MAYA, MEXICO

          Thanks again everyone!!!
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          Amy & Aaron
          May 10, 2008
          Dreams Tulum, Riviera Maya, Mexico




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