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#1 cheese_diva

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    Posted 03 July 2007 - 05:48 PM

    What do you think of this wording? Not sure if I love it. Ignore the fact that some text is in caps, some small.


    Because you have shared in our lives
    With your friendship and love, we


    Angela XXXXXX
    and
    Matthew XXXXX


    Invite you to share in our happiness
    As we become husband and wife

    SUNDAY, the TWENTY-EIGHTH day of october
    TWO THOUSAND and SEVEN
    At FOUR O’CLOCK IN THE AFTERNOON

    On the beach

    DREAMS RESORT & SPA
    CABO SAN LUCAS, MEXICO

    A CELEBRATION WILL FOLLOW
    IN HONOR OF LIFE, LOVE
    AND THE PEOPLE WE CHERISH MOST

    WE HOPE YOU WILL JOIN US
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    #2 cheese_diva

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      Posted 03 July 2007 - 06:14 PM

      R. S. V. P.

      Join us in Paradise!

      Kindly respond by the 28th of September

      We have reserved ______ seat(s) in your honor



      _________________________________
      Name(s)


      _____ is/are looking forward
      to the fiesta, arriba!

      _____ Has/Have to miss the fun
      under the Mexican sun.


      Please initial entr©e choice for each guest

      _____ Sea Bass in beurre blanc sauce

      _____ Beef Tenderloin in red wine sauce

      please share with us your arrival date and Accommodations
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      #3 dragonfly

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        Posted 03 July 2007 - 06:17 PM

        I like it, what about it are you not liking?

        #4 CourtneyV

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          Posted 03 July 2007 - 06:21 PM

          Well, honestly. It's good. My uncle sent us invitations to his wedding this year that said pretty much exactly the same thing... but maybe that's my point. It's definately nice, but it's missing that zazz that can be added with a DW. Just my honest opinion. I wanted to try something that was a little different from all the other invitations people receive every summer. Especially if they're DIY, you might want to add a little beach flavour to it... IMO
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          #5 cheese_diva

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            Posted 03 July 2007 - 06:35 PM

            I'm not loving the "Because you have shared in our lives With your friendship and love, we" or the verse under our names.

            I've looked at a zillion invites.. but can't quite figure out the wording.. I don't want it stiff, but not so loosey goosey either.. no ocean poems... although beautiful, we aren't really "beach" people.. funny since we're marrying on a beach.
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            #6 Janet

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              Posted 03 July 2007 - 06:36 PM

              I have see the "because you have shared in our lives..." beginning a lot recently. So, I like it, but it's no longer "original" if that is what you are going for. But if you don't care about that, then go for it!

              Are you worried about people bringing kids or boyfriends or non-invited guests and that's why you have the "we reserved ____ spots for you"?

              #7 CourtneyV

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                Posted 03 July 2007 - 06:45 PM

                Quote:
                Originally Posted by JANET1111
                I have see the "because you have shared in our lives..." beginning a lot recently. So, I like it, but it's no longer "original" if that is what you are going for. But if you don't care about that, then go for it!
                That's what I meant, only you said it 50 times better!! lol
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                #8 cheese_diva

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                  Posted 03 July 2007 - 07:06 PM

                  what about?

                  In a tropical paradise surrounded by family and friends

                  Angela xxxxxx
                  and
                  Matthew xxxxx


                  INVITE YOU TO SHARE THE SUN, SEA
                  AND MEMORIES OF OUR WEDDING DAY

                  SUNDAY, the TWENTY-EIGHTH day of october
                  TWO THOUSAND and SEVEN
                  At FOUR O’CLOCK IN THE AFTERNOON

                  on the beach

                  DREAMS RESORT & SPA
                  CABO SAN LUCAS, MEXICO

                  A CELEBRATION WILL FOLLOW
                  IN HONOR OF LIFE, LOVE
                  AND THE PEOPLE WE CHERISH MOST
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                  #9 cheese_diva

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                    Posted 03 July 2007 - 07:08 PM

                    Quote:
                    Originally Posted by JANET1111

                    Are you worried about people bringing kids or boyfriends or non-invited guests and that's why you have the "we reserved ____ spots for you"?
                    That was the original thought, but I think most people have booked and that would mean I have to open each invite and write a number... I think I'll remove.
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                    #10 cheese_diva

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                      Posted 16 July 2007 - 03:34 PM

                      I just got my samples and I LOVE them!!! There was a slight confusion with the paper color.. my actual invites will be a tad more blue.. these are more of a blue green but I hope my guests are really impressed. I'll write a review as soon as my process is done...

                      I do need help with two more things.. On the main invite it says

                      Angela xxxx and Matthew xxxx
                      Invite you to share the sun, sea and memories of our wedding day

                      Shouldn't it say "their"? The designer says it won't fit because it makes the line too long and says it's ok because of the casual wording.. what do you think?

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                      The RSVP is a postcard so that will help with postage.


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                      I have a Wedding Weekend insert that lists our welcome dinner plans and the wedding/reception plans.. There is a day (Saturday) in between the two. I want to say something about enjoying their vacation on this day but not sure how to word it.. currently it says

                      Day of Leisure
                      Saturday, October 27th
                      Enjoy yourself next to the pool or under a palapa on the beach. Dresams Resort also has a spa that offers massages under the stars. The concierge will be able to help you make other recreationals plans should you choose to go into either Cabo San Lucas or Sand Jose Del Cabo.

                      It sounds chunky instead of fun. We don't wont to tell people what to do.. they are on vacation after all but it does fill up the page. Any ideas?

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                      I didn't upload a picture of the best part!!! It comes in a light brown box with a leather band and large sand dollar around it. Here's a link to the designer's site:
                      Eiffel Printing & Design - 5x7 Tiffany Blue Marsupial with cane paper and sand dollars.
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