Help with wording for invitation inserts

[taugania]

Hey Ladies,

 

Since you all are so excellent at providing information and suggestions I figured I'd ask for your advice. I have decided to DIY my pocketfold invitations but now I'm stuck on the wording for my reception insert and my RSVP. Writing has never been a strong point for me and I always fiddle around and question myself a LOT. I would love to hear any suggestions and opinions. Thanks in advance for your help.

Background: We are getting married on the beach. There will be cake and cocktails (for about 45 min) at the beach after the ceremony. Afterward we will get back on the shuttles to our cruise ship where we will have dinner at one of the restaurants. We will decide what to do after dinner that day as we will have to see what's going on for entertainment on the cruise ship. We will also have a casual at home reception in September. We have not set a date for this and don't have all the details yet.

 

Here's the wording:

 

Reception Insert:

 

Bermuda: Immediately following the wedding there will be cake and drinks on the beach. Transportation will take us back to the cruise ship where we will have dinner.

 

Charlotte: There will be a casual celebration in September after the wedding. More details will be sent if you are interested in attending.

 

RSVP Insert:

 

Please respond by May 15, 2010

 

Name(s):__________________________________

___________________________________________

 

___Looking forward to cruising to your wedding

 

___Can’t make the cruise. Please send information about the celebration in Charlotte

 

___Won’t be able to attend either event

 

 

 

Thanks again for your help.

[merocket59]

Here is what I did for my RSVPs, I like yours but feel free to steal any of my wording it's a combination of things from different sites:

Please respond by

July 1, 2009

Or you’ll have to walk the plank

 

 

Full Legal Name(s) and Date(s) of Birth (for sailing or non-sailing guests)

____________________________

____________________________

____________________________

____________________________

_____ We will sea you for the entire cruise

_____ It’s a shore thing, but we’re not sailing

_____ Sorry we are all tide up that week

 

As for your reception details what you have is fine but I'll give you other suggestions and you can use them or not I won't be offended

Please join the bride and groom following the ceremony on the pure pink Bermuda sands for beverages and an intimate cake cutting. The fun doesn't stop there, our transportation will bring us back to a delectable dinner aboard the (name of ship).

The bride and groom are also arranging an casual Charolette celebration in September, more details to come.

[taugania]

Quote:

Originally Posted by merocket59 Here is what I did for my RSVPs, I like yours but feel free to steal any of my wording it's a combination of things from different sites..............

Thanks soooo much for your suggestions!!!! I LOVE what you came up w/ for the Reception details. I needed something with more spunk. I really appreciate your response.